Saturday, November 10, 2012

Final Good Bye~


She looked like a skeleton
With loose skin on her bones
Her eyes were transparent
Her feelings were unknown
She wore a bright turban
Her hair was mostly gone
She looked much older
Than her forty two years
And seemed unaware
Of people and their despair
Lying on a bed
Blanched and drained
Pale as a white rose
Weathered and wasted
Life had taken a turn
Landing her in a storm
Alien and alienated
She forgot where she’s from…

Her family had gathered
For a final goodbye
Questions on their mind
‘Whats’ and ‘whys’
Her laughter broke the silence
When she thanked one and all
Her strength had given up
Her spirits hung on_

Note: Dedicated to every single cancer patient out there fighting for life.










This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda

76 comments:

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    1. Thank you Deepz for reading this. I have always wondered how it must feel to know your days are numbered...

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  2. A very vivid and moving description. Very effective.

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    1. Dear Meenakshi,

      This is about someone I know. Thanks for reading :)

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  3. Nice touchy one... I have known several who suffered in their lives and sadly they are no more... Still there are people who fight this disease with courage and determination and they also inspire others to fight against this rather than to rot in despair... Lance Armstrong, Yuvi and several have created wide awareness about this one.. Kudos to your writing :)

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    1. Thank you Hari,

      I am so happy to know that you were touche by this.

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  4. It is touching.... a beautiful ode to all those survivors who fight with every core of their existence :)

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    1. Dear Privy,

      Thank you for your support. Sometimes, they do not survive but their will always impresses all around.

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  5. Very touching Ghazla. What a Cancer patient manages to pull though is mean, s/he carries the burden of the disease and her familys suffering along.

    May some cure be found. May targeted drug theraphy be successful and also affordable..

    Do stop by my blog! I'd love your comments & visits!!

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    1. Dear Kappu,

      With so much pollution and chemical discharge in air, cancer is gone common. It is sad and high time someone found a complete cure.

      Thank you, will stop by your post for sure~

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  6. "Her laughter broke the silence" and hearts

    It's my duty to spread this dedication...

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  7. Wow! Such a beautiful and heartfelt depiction of a cancer patient. I wish there strength never goes but the disease goes with medication. Commendable piece

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    1. Dear Tanya,

      I agree, may their disease goes fast. Thanks for this heartfelt comment :)

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  8. Hope soon, really soon, the scientists and doctors find a way to wipe off this horrible disease from our world!

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  9. This is lovely! Reading you for the first time! The ending was pulled beautifully! Keep up the good work!

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    1. Thanks Rinzu,

      This felt good, a pat is always welcome from readers :)

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  10. It's really a winning post! Good luck! :)

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  11. Poetry is not my thing, Ghazala, but this I had to read. My mother went through this trauma and was as spirited as your protagonist was. Unfortunately, she did not survive.

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    1. I am sorry to hear about your Mom Suresh. I lost my mom to cancer and know the pain.

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    2. Suresh,

      I am sorry to hear about your Mom. But you must be a proud son for her spirit lives on...

      Farila,

      Sorry to know about your Mom. I know a few people, especially ladies who are going through this. I salute them. As for you, hats off. Hugs~

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  12. Her strength had given up
    Her spirits hung on


    that's true of most cancer patients --have seen most of them fight as long as they can ---this is a touching post Ghazala

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    1. dear Rajni,

      Always a pleasure to see you here. You're right, they are wonderful people, who live with a smile even after so much physical pain...
      Thanks~

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  13. Very sad and sorely touching!
    Beautifully written, Ghazala!!

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  14. the will to go on is definitely more important than all the medications and chemotherapy put together....and the least friends and family can do is help them sustain that spirit...hats off to you for bringing out the emotions so beautifully...

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    1. Thank you girl, I am right there with you :)

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  15. Very strong and effective words , well done !

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  16. Ghazala, i know 2 women in my family who have come out of cancer successfully. Its very painful seeing them go through all that they have to. God bless those who are, and I wish them more strength, you post just got me thinking.....

    Off topic, wish u a very happy diwali!!!!

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    1. Dear poonam,

      I have seen a few going through and it always breaks my heart. Why do they have to suffer so much. What is their fault?

      Thanks for adding to my post~

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  17. Sad

    We in family are going through this , so it is sad i know

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    1. It is heart braking. Sorry to hear about your family situation. please take care ~

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  18. As the wife of an oncosurgeon I know that this scenario is much more common than we think it is. Please all u smokers n gutka users stop today

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    1. Varsha,

      A very good advise..! And you are right, hospitals are over flowing with such patients.

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  19. The description totally reminds me of my Grandmom who died of cancer.... The last Goodbye is indeed painful.

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    1. I am sorry, I can understand how this must have hurt. I described a cancer patient I had met, who did not survive but her face lingers on my memories~

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  21. God give strength to those who have to face this situation. The victims and their families too. That was a very touching post Ghazala.

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  22. A heartbreaking post but uplifting in some sense.

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  23. Somehow I managed to kick the cancer butt so hard that it ended up in bed for 17 years.. and I am enjoying my life. :)

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  24. That was a touching and soul stirring tribute. Painfully moving! I can only try to imagine how much pain, angst and agony a cancer patient would face. But their strength and spirit even at such adversity is remarkable.

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    1. Yes, it is impossible to imagine what they go through. However, their strength and spirit is unbelievable. Thank you~

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  25. The condition of Hiv patients are more worse than these ones.They are even thrown out from homes by their nearest people..they are on the roads just like dogs...We are seeing this dreadful truth now..ALL THE BEST.

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    1. I know what you mean, thanks for sharing your views~

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  26. I met a child suffering from cancer sometime back and I felt how cruel life can get ... lets hope and pray that medical science can find a cure for all types of cancer .

    Your poem is very touching .

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    1. Lets hope and pray. This, one cure is over due. Thanks TTT~

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  27. I have seen people struggle to survive. And come to know of the ugly side of us. Relatives come and try to get the ATM card, pin numbers etc etc... No body cares of the person struggling to live. Money Matters Most.
    Sabyasachi

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    1. Hi Sabya,

      Such is life. So sad and true. Thanks for adding to my post~

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  28. Ghaz...This is raw, honest and true. Kudos for writing this piece!!
    Life can be horrible, painful for cancer-patients. My Mom n my MIL both had cancer and they stayed with me till the last; so I know, how it is...sad:(
    Immaculate...well done!

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    1. dear Panchalidi,

      You are blessed for you took care of two people close to you. You have a big heart and it shows.
      Love you all the more for this :)

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    1. Thanks, nice of you to let me know. Makes me want to write more ~

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  30. Touching words!!! I can almost visualize this in my mind!!!

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  31. What a sad story.
    Very nicely written. This one touched us all, Ghazala.

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  32. So sad,i wonder why there is so much suffering in this world.And when the protaagonists show such courage in it's face it is no less than a marvel.

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  33. Its very tough to face the ordeal when its cancer.. And makes me scary to even think how does the person face it all..the ailment and suffering is too big.. when u know u r dying, u have to be very strong for ur ownself and for the people around..

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  34. Wonderful dedication. It was expressive and beautiful.

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  35. A very touching post. Your poem reminded me of my cousin who passed away a few years back due to cancer. When I visited her a couple of days before she died, she looked exactly like what you've described in your poem. It was so sad to see her in that condition.

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  36. very effectively brought out....dard ko bhasha dena easy nahi hota but u did it.....

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